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一、雅思小作文题目:

拯救濒危语言 Simon是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官,由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议,甚至还有不少Simon本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之手,非常地道,言简意赅,和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比,着实让人眼前一亮。小站的Phoebe老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的好作文,所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华,相信大家都可以扔掉模板,写出高分作文!



今天带来一篇大作文,题目如下:

Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money.

Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

在写作之前,先跟大家讲一下首尾段的写作技巧,以下是Simon的总结和范例:

Here is a review of my advice for task 2 introductions:(introdution段落写法总结)

· Make the introduction short and do it quickly. The main body paragraphs are more important.(首段要简短,快速完成,主体段才是最重要的)

· Two sentences are enough: 1) introduce the topic. 2) give a basic answer to the question.(两句话足够了:一句引入主题,一句对问题给出基本作答)

Example question:

All high school students should be encouraged to take part in community service programmes.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

My introduction:

Some people believe that high school students would benefit from doing unpaid work in their local communities. I completely agree that community service programmes for teenagers are a good idea.

总结:虽然只有两句话,Simon用了大量的同义替换,避免重复,短小精悍,值得借鉴。

Several people have asked me about conclusions for IELTS Writing Task 2. The main body paragraphs are much more important, so don't worry too much about the conclusion; make it short, simple and fast.(尾段同样不如主体段重要,也要做到简短,快速完成)

Here are some example conclusion phrases for different types of question(以下是四种不同类型大作文的尾段写法):

1. Opinion

For the reasons mentioned above, I believe that... (+ repeat your opinion).

2. Discussion (+ Opinion)

In conclusion, there are convincing arguments both for and against... (topic), but I believe that... (if the question asks for your opinion).

3. Advantages and Disadvantages

In conclusion, I would argue that the benefits of... (topic) outweigh the drawbacks.

4. Problem and Solution

In conclusion, it is clear that there are various reasons for... (topic), and steps need to be taken to tackle this problem.

总结:不同类型的大作文要用不同句型的结尾,这样才能确保总结到位。

接下来大家按照Simon的指示写一下今天的作文,写好对照范文。



完整范文:

It is true that some minority languages may disappear in the near future. Although it can be argued that governments could save money by allowing this to happen, I believe that these languages should be protected and preserved.

There are several reasons why saving minority languages could be seen as a waste of money. Firstly, if a language is only spoken by a small number of people, expensive education programmes will be needed to make sure that more people learn it, and the state will have to pay for facilities, teachers and marketing. This money might be better spent on other public services. Secondly, it would be much cheaper and more efficient for countries to have just one language. Governments could cut all kinds of costs related to communicating with each minority group.

Despite the above arguments, I believe that governments should try to preserve languages that are less widely spoken. A language is much more than simply a means of communication; it has a vital connection with the cultural identity of the people who speak it. If a language disappears, a whole way of life will disappear with it, and we will lose the rich cultural diversity that makes societies more interesting. By spending money to protect minority languages, governments can also preserve traditions, customs and behaviours that are part of a country’s history.

In conclusion, it may save money in the short term if we allow minority languages to disappear, but in the long term this would have an extremely negative impact on our cultural heritage.

(258 words)

词汇总结:

preserve: 保存,保护

facility: 设施

extremely: 极其地

in the long term: 长期来看

二、雅思小作文开头:

博物馆用途 Simon是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官,由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议,甚至还有不少Simon本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之手,非常地道,言简意赅,和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比,着实让人眼前一亮。小站的Phoebe老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的好作文,所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华,相信大家都可以扔掉模板,写出高分作文!



今天我们来看一篇大作文,题目如下:

Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people, while others believe that the purpose of museums is to educate.

Discuss both views and give you own opinion.

首先,大家都知道,按照写作评分标准,要求大家在写作的时候尽量做到词汇多变。接下来就来训练一下,先把题目中三个关键词相关的词语都写出来:

Museums:

· exhibition, exhibit (verb, like 'show'), an exhibit (noun, 'item'), artifact, object, collection, history, science, art, culture, visitors, members of the public, public viewing...

Entertain:

· entertainment, entertaining, enjoy, enjoyment, enjoyable, have fun, interesting, fascinating, spectacular, impressive, leisure time, free time, a day out, tourist attraction...

Educate:

· education, educational, teach, learn, explain, understand, know, gain/expand/pass on/transmit knowledge, skills, experience, open your mind, broaden your horizons...

Simon说,Making lists of related words is a good way to generate ideas. You might not have time to do this in the exam, but it's a useful study technique.列出相关词是一个培养思想的好办法,你可能在考试中没有时间做这件事,但是是一个有用的学习技巧。接下来大家写一下今天的作文,然后和范文对照。



完整范文:

People have different views about the role and function of museums. In my opinion, museums can and should be both entertaining and educational.

On the one hand, it can be argued that the main role of a museum is to entertain. Museums are tourist attractions, and their aim is to exhibit a collection of interesting objects that many people will want to see. The average visitor may become bored if he or she has to read or listen to too much educational content, so museums often put more of an emphasis on enjoyment rather than learning. This type of museum is designed to be visually spectacular, and may have interactive activities or even games as part of its exhibitions.

On the other hand, some people argue that museums should focus on education. The aim of any exhibition should be to teach visitors something that they did not previously know. Usually this means that the history behind the museum’s exhibits needs to be explained, and this can be done in various ways. Some museums employ professional guides to talk to their visitors, while other museums offer headsets so that visitors can listen to detailed commentary about the exhibition. In this way, museums can play an important role in teaching people about history, culture, science and many other aspects of life.

In conclusion, it seems to me that a good museum should be able to offer an interesting, enjoyable and educational experience so that people can have fun and learn something at the same time.

(253 words, band 9)

词汇总结:

visually:视觉上地

spectacular: 壮观地,引人入胜地

interactive: 互动式的

previously: 之前地

headsets: 头戴式耳机

detailed: 详细的

commentary: 评论

三、雅思小作文结尾:

横向柱状图 Simon是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官,由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议,甚至还有不少Simon本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之手,非常地道,言简意赅,和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比,着实让人眼前一亮。小站的Phoebe老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的好作文,所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华,相信大家都可以扔掉模板,写出高分作文!

话不多说,我们来看这样一个小作文:

The charts below compare the age structure of the populations of France and India in 1984.



看到这样一个图形大家会觉得这道题很难吧,Simon看到题目时这样说,“I found this one difficult, so don't worry if you did too!”。所以大家别怕,连雅思考官都说难呢!

我们先来分析一下,该图描述的是法国和印度两个国家的不同年龄的人群所占的比例。从图中我们可以看出,印度人口显然比法国整体上要年轻,因为20岁以下印度的人口占了相当大的比例;而法国呢,则上年纪的人居多。

再说得细致点,印度小于五岁的人口占了14%%uFF0C从上往下随着年纪呈递增趋势;法国相对就比较分散了,0到40岁的人似乎都在7%%u81F38%%u4E4B间波动。70岁以上人口法国大概有15%%uFF0C而印度只有2%%u3002

然后我们再来说性别,50岁以上的法国女人显著比法国男人比例高,而印度人口在男女比例上却看不出显著不同。



分析完了思路,我们马上来看一下Simon写的这篇满分作文吧!

The two charts compare the populations of France and India in terms of age distribution by gender in the year 1984.(第一段不需要太长,简单明了,留下好印象,提起考官兴趣。)

It is clear that the population of India was younger than that of France in 1984, with a noticeably larger proportion of people aged under 20. France, on the other hand, had a significantly larger percentage of elderly inhabitants.(先介绍两个国家整体上最明显的对比)

In India, close to 14% of people were aged 5 or under, and each five-year age bracket above this contained an increasingly smaller proportion of the population. France’s population, by contrast, was more evenly distributed across the age ranges, with similar figures (around 7% to 8% of all people) for each five-year cohort between the ages of 0 and 40. Somewhere between 10% and 15% of all French people were aged 70 or older, but the equivalent figure for India was only 2%.(详细分析两个国家差别最明显的年龄群体并以详实的数据进行描述)

Looking more closely at gender, there was a noticeably higher proportion of French women than men in every cohort from age 50 upwards. For example, almost 3% of French 70- to 75-year-olds were women, while just under 2% were men. No significant gender differences can be seen on the Indian population chart.(最后不忘从性别的角度去分析人口比例的差距。图表中信息已经全部展现,无须结尾)

(199 words, band 9)

最后想要强调的是,Simon作为native speaker,对于词汇的使用非常精准,了解其汉意和使用,今后尽量让这些词汇出现在自己的作文里,也写出地道的好文章。


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